The First Necromancer


#1

A small story for the Tutorial page …


#2

I like it! I’m a huge sucker for flavor.

A couple nitpicks:

  • “standing aside it” should probably be “standing beside it”; I’ve never used “stand aside” used transitively. Though maybe that’s something Australians say?
  • “the feint smile” should definitely be “the faint smile”.

#3

I’ve already cut the bit about the feint smile :slight_smile:

That should be “astride”, but not sure if that’s quite right either.


#4

“Astride” would be a pretty weird visual, haha. I’m pretty sure that word always means more or less “with a leg on either side of”.


#5

Yes, I think you’re right. I was more trying to get at one standing at either end haha.